tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post6603701798127442863..comments2024-03-25T22:25:27.515+05:30Comments on Madly-in-Verse: Write...Edit...Publish...August 2015 : Spectacular SettingsNilanjana Bosehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08656370320322301943noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-27950707917664850672015-09-01T11:58:09.591+05:302015-09-01T11:58:09.591+05:30Another excerpt from Cry, The Beloved Country...se...Another excerpt from Cry, The Beloved Country...seems I might have to check that one out.<br /><br />Loved your little excerpt! it put me right in that car, impatiently waiting for things to get moving again. It is a sad fact of the pace of life that people have in big cities that they can't just stop to appreciate the beauty of nature around them.<br /><br />Though it seems Laval does, if Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06017756012813695025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-3305918856794322912015-09-01T08:04:35.151+05:302015-09-01T08:04:35.151+05:30This was a full sensory experience-I felt like I w...This was a full sensory experience-I felt like I was really there. Love the contrast between the woman and the pineapple, also I loved the fact that he had a tablet-the juxtaposition of the modern and the rural.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05161178778732701008noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-31443452683913450472015-08-24T05:59:25.910+05:302015-08-24T05:59:25.910+05:30Ooh, I loved the humanizing of the man noticing th...Ooh, I loved the humanizing of the man noticing the slim waistline of the woman passing by and then trying to distract himself with the juice pineapple. Very nice. The descriptions paint a vivid landscape for me, Nila, and I love the real images you included. Beautiful.D.G. Hudsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06213237734772028645noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-31777541290641765712015-08-24T05:41:51.531+05:302015-08-24T05:41:51.531+05:30The Roadblock selection was very nice. It excites ...The Roadblock selection was very nice. It excites all the senses and paints an interesting backdrop for your characters.Scheherazadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08906467791904395295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-82023528117483722652015-08-24T03:53:46.686+05:302015-08-24T03:53:46.686+05:30* A side note:
Most American's will not know w...* A side note:<br />Most American's will not know what a lorry is. If that's part of your target audience, you may opt to consider that information.J Lenni Dornerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07961335286982498158noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-24973971043283782462015-08-24T03:52:19.196+05:302015-08-24T03:52:19.196+05:30I really enjoyed this. There's a sense of urge...I really enjoyed this. There's a sense of urgency. There's something in the way, something the main character can do nothing about. It's obvious that something is about to happen. You've built excellent tension and really made the setting vital. This scene obviously couldn't just take place somewhere else. Excellent job.J Lenni Dornerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07961335286982498158noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-17331997252758649342015-08-23T18:58:37.322+05:302015-08-23T18:58:37.322+05:30Hi, Nila,
Agreed, amazing excerpt from CRY...
You...Hi, Nila,<br />Agreed, amazing excerpt from CRY...<br /><br />Your pics of the mountains are stunning. I can see how they inspired to write Roadblock. Enjoyed the setting and characters. Their chemistry was intriguing and real.... Michael Di Gesuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-44395659622614347942015-08-22T16:09:49.065+05:302015-08-22T16:09:49.065+05:30Wonderfully done. Having taken this most fascinati...Wonderfully done. Having taken this most fascinating journey it was hard to return to reality. RasmaSandrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11978012654446052037noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-9514093733424050102015-08-21T21:10:44.094+05:302015-08-21T21:10:44.094+05:30What a wonderful Himalayan journey!
I was there......What a wonderful Himalayan journey!<br />I was there... soaking it all in... <br />Roadblock is a wonderful piece!<br />The first impression was a sense of vastness. Then I could see the snaking line of vehicles ahead, hear the percussive beat of the cab-driver's fingers, observed the young labourer's bright orange swaying figure. <br />A multi-sensory appeal!<br /><br />I also posted Michelle Wallacehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02750092836481599870noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-70457197847068229042015-08-20T22:23:51.123+05:302015-08-20T22:23:51.123+05:30The setting in Cry the Beloved Country is absolute...The setting in Cry the Beloved Country is absolutely amazing. Your story took me immediately to the traffic jams caused by monsoon landslides with all the attendant vendors. Kalpanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02503951641129389045noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-54437084021532145402015-08-20T01:46:10.458+05:302015-08-20T01:46:10.458+05:30Great sense of place in your piece, not only '...Great sense of place in your piece, not only 'where' but also 'who' and 'what'. Olga Godimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00358026814685611301noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-61597146258589489372015-08-19T21:59:15.583+05:302015-08-19T21:59:15.583+05:30Nila
Cry, the Beloved Country, is a marvelous choi...Nila<br />Cry, the Beloved Country, is a marvelous choice for setting. The contrasts are inspired, lyrical, but sad for the harshness.<br /><br />Your story Roadblock is inspired. You reminded me of how words transport and why reading was, and still is a haven. <br />A favorite for me, the description of the driver:<br /><br />"The driver tapped nonchalantly with his fingers on the steeringYolanda Renéehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09085436784133103221noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-16338468193358651492015-08-19T21:04:17.475+05:302015-08-19T21:04:17.475+05:30I enjoyed both these excerpts, but your sample was...I enjoyed both these excerpts, but your sample was more engaging, for me. I've never been to India, but always enjoying reading about it. Even the parts that aren't so pretty have a beauty to them and you capture that so well. I like the way "traffic" is depicted here. It's not the same as being on the highway here in the states; there's no culture clash sitting in your Toi Thomashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07493934864387695248noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-75751435864862278342015-08-19T20:44:05.356+05:302015-08-19T20:44:05.356+05:30Your excerpt certainly transports a reader to that...Your excerpt certainly transports a reader to that exotic location and then the line: 'Keep it, guard it, care for it, for it keeps men, guards men and cares for men. Destroy it and man is destroyed…' - what are we doing to our planet? We must take more care of it. <br /><br />I love your flash of the impatient business man, technology and the slower pace and patient of the actual Sallyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14090018804016223955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-54983167841849759122015-08-19T20:11:59.981+05:302015-08-19T20:11:59.981+05:30Love the excerpt. Yes, I do agree with you about t...Love the excerpt. Yes, I do agree with you about that classic. I enjoyed reading your story. I would love to visit there one day. But in a way I have. After reading your piece. Very well written. Robyn Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17356555082768185840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-62268814640339906162015-08-19T17:08:05.577+05:302015-08-19T17:08:05.577+05:30Hi Nila - Cry the Beloved Country is a classic (A ...Hi Nila - Cry the Beloved Country is a classic (A Story of Comfort in Desolation: says even more) ... and so evocative ... inadvertently I've been reading quite a lot about SA and apartheid and the countryside ... all drawing me in.<br /><br />Your excerpt - the Himalayas, the desire to get going, the desire - the girl doing her hard labours ... I'd love to read more .. and one day I willHilary Melton-Butcherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17596532480645510678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-57520192668456839592015-08-19T11:48:44.103+05:302015-08-19T11:48:44.103+05:30Cry, The Beloved Country made a huge impact on me ...Cry, The Beloved Country made a huge impact on me when first I read it many years ago. You have reminded me I should reread it. And why I should. Thank you.<br />I loved your story. I was there in the car, and I was also back in the foothills of the HImalayas again. A beautiful, demanding, rewarding place. Somewhere I have only visited once, and which carved a niche in my heart.Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-53296182750544610672015-08-19T07:13:56.637+05:302015-08-19T07:13:56.637+05:30I loved the film, Cry, the Beloved Country. So pow...I loved the film, Cry, the Beloved Country. So powerful. Another heart-rending story is The Power of One by Bryce Courtney. The book is far better than the movie on this one.<br /><br />Loved your excerpt. The poetic description, '...they are lovely beyond any singing of it' wowed me. Second time today I've read such beautiful words describing such ugliness and cruelty.<br /><br />Denise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-28168174295812565402015-08-19T03:39:04.220+05:302015-08-19T03:39:04.220+05:30The beginning of CRY, THE BELOVED COUNTRY is a cla...The beginning of CRY, THE BELOVED COUNTRY is a classic of great lyrical writing, isn't it? Your flash fiction was evocative as well, I was there. :-)Roland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3147719773752098767.post-33218553713572322822015-08-19T03:32:20.682+05:302015-08-19T03:32:20.682+05:30What can I say? The excerpt from 'Cry, the Bel...What can I say? The excerpt from 'Cry, the Beloved Country' is divine. 'Roadblock' is an exquisitely wrapped gift for the senses. Thank you.Jenny Brigalowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10463833821337419039noreply@blogger.com