Tuesday, 20 June 2023

Write... Edit... Publish... June 2023 : Close Encounters of the Third Kind

 

It's June and it's time to get back to Write...Edit...Publish... where the prompt is based on the iconic sci-fi movie by Steven Spielberg - Close Encounters of the Third Kind. There is much going on at WEP apart from the Challenges, we have a series of 'how-to' articles relating to writing, publishing and flash fiction, we are actively working on the modalities of the antho, so do go check out the site and keep your eyes peeled and ears cocked.


Re the Challenges, let me repeat here what I've said on the WEP site also - the prompt being drawn from a movie poster doesn't mean the writing has to reflect the movie in any detail - not the plot, not the genre, nil, zilch, nada. Use any element that you want from it, whatever inspires you, whatever small or big part helps your interpretation come together. You don't have to watch the movie and/or know a single thing about it. 


That said, I'm myself using the prompt only tangentially to continue the story that I started last December. With a minor change of voice, as I find the mixed first and second POV I had started with  has got too restrictive, I had no inkling the story would grow to this length. This is the 4th part, done in a simple first person POV. Read the other parts here (Chiaroscuro I),  here (Chiaroscuro II : The Evidence in Black & White) and here (Chiaroscuro III : Colour it Beautiful))


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For those who don’t have the time to read previous entries, here’s a brief synopsis -


The MC finds a B/W profile picture on a social media platform intriguing. He writes on an impulse to the woman and finds that the picture is of her grandmother and was shot in a studio that once belonged to a relative, now dead. 

The MC goes back to his hometown and explores the derelict studio. He finally comes upon a series of nudes of a woman in different stages of life, the last of which he recognises as the grandmother.

He finds a letter that breaks the bombshell news that his Great Uncle Sam, the studio owner and the grandmother had an ongoing relationship. He meets with the granddaughter in their common hometown... Read on to find what happens next.


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Incidentally, this here is my 1000th post here on M-i-V (I know! Who'd have thought, right?) For some, not-so-strange reason, it pleases me exceedingly that it's a WEP entry! 

Thank you for being this massively enjoyable, grounding, supportive, cherished and meaningful part of my online world!




Chiaroscuro IV : River Flame

 

“Are you done?” Mukta smiled. “I’m supposed to be the one with the questions, aren’t I? What did you find?”

 

There was no good way to tell a granddaughter that her obviously idolised grandma had been in a lifelong, illicit relationship and had at least one child, if not all her children, from it.  In fact, there was my family too – Sam Gain’s nieces and the nephews-in-law. It had occurred to me that if Kaustubh was truly Sam’s son – and so far the signals were he was highly likely to be, then the studio belonged to him rather than my mother and aunts.   

 

I looked around the café. It was one of those spanking new ones, all muted geometric wallpapers, spiky chandeliers and futuristic décor combined with retro sci-fi film posters. On my right was one from Close Encounters of the Third Kind, across the room on the far wall were posters from Fantastic Voyage, Things to Come, Forbidden Planet – all ominously apt. It was bristling with afternoon crowds – too much noise, too many people, it did not feel the least like the ideal ambience for the breaking of bombshell news.

 

“Do you really want to know?” I stalled. “It might make sense to let sleeping dogs lie.”

“That’s crazy, no way! Of course I want to know!”

“It’s complicated. Not a feel-good story, Mukta.” I called for the bill. “We’ll have to find a quieter place. I’m not saying anything here, c’mon.”


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We found ourselves one of those ancient eateries in a bye lane off Esplanade. The ones which had those curtained off cubicles for so called ‘family’ seating, used more as hideaways by couples reluctant to go public. It was emptier – unmarried couples had far less reasons to hide from public view now. On second thought, maybe not, what with the love-jihad gangs – perma-outraged right-wingers pouncing on any couple unfortunate enough to be mixed faith. Intercaste had got substituted by interfaith nowadays, that was all.

 

“What was her  name?” I asked as I handed over the letter.

“Janhobi. Janhobi Jyoti.”


She read the letter and sat silent for some time. “There’s no signature. How can one be sure?”

I was prepared. “There was a bunch of photos.” I whipped out my phone – opened the cropped versions and handed it to Mukta. “In the same envelope.”

“Still. It’s not ironclad.”

“Pretty much. Your Uncle and Aunt being named Kaustubh and Amrita, exactly as she said…”

“Where are the originals?”

“They are works of art. I thought I’d ask before I brought them over. They’re nudes. I wasn’t sure if you’d want to see them.”

She looked at the cellphone for the longest minute, silent. “Talk about digging up a snake thinking it’s an earthworm! She was a strong woman though.” The smile had vanished from her voice. “I can’t quite wrap my head around the lie that’s involved, that’s so out of character. So unlike her. Scandalous, in those times.”

“It’s scandalous now too. I don’t think our society’s broad minded enough to accept pre-marital relationships, or children resulting from them. Folks would still go up in smoke. Your relatives won’t be best pleased for sure. The man you know as your father or grandfather all your life is suddenly not, how can that not be earth shattering? I’m so sorry, Mukta.”

“This is just beyond belief. Does that mean my father is also not my grandfather’s...?”

“Listen, we could just forget this ever happened.”

“I don’t think I could. I can’t unread that letter, unsee the photos. I wouldn’t forget in a hundred years. Would you?”

“Possibly not. What is bothering me is also that your family likely has a greater claim on my Great-Uncle Sam’s property – his studio and the buildings and whatever else was there. Not exactly a fortune but still…a whole heap of legalities would be involved if there’s a claim.”

“Good heavens! That also means we, me and you, share ancestors. We are some sort of cousins or half cousins or something.”

“Yes.” I shrugged. “That’s really the least of our problems, I’d think.”

“Will you come for a stroll with me? I don’t think I can go back right now.”

“Sure. Do us both good.”


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The afternoon had lengthened into evening. We walked out in silence through the narrow lanes, crossed Esplanade and finally onto Red Road. The streetlamps came on and dappled the pavement with leaf shadows the size of my palms. I looked up at the great trees lining the boulevard, filled now with returning birds, always a poignant metaphor whether homing, migratory, nesting or flying off.

 

The silence felt like a metaphor too. This wasn’t going anywhere. Should I have said nothing, pretended the search had just fizzled out? Such a huge lie, though. Is a pleasant lie ever acceptable over an uncomfortable truth? …Priyam cha nanrutam bruyat esha dharmah sanatanahDo not speak a falsehood even if it is pleasant, that’s the path of eternal righteousness.


The traffic thickened all around us as the rush hour gripped the city in its stranglehold. She broke the silence at Victoria.

“I think I can manage now. Thank you, Shovan. For being honest with me. For everything.”

“I’m sorry. This was drastic.”

“It’s not your fault. And you did give me the choice not to know. Definitely drastic!”

“Think about what you want to do. And know for sure this won’t go any further. I’m only a phone call away. In this country and over there as well.”

 

She nodded, waved crisply, then turned and walked off, the set of her shoulders incredibly vulnerable and lonely among the knots of waiting commuters. I would not blame her if she got home and ghosted me forever.

 

WC – 954

FCA

Tagline : How not to meet an online friend face to face.


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36 comments:

  1. Hari OM
    Oh this story just keeps giving! Love what you have done with it, Nila. YAM xx (Who is travelling just now and a bit erratic at the blogs!)

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    1. Looking forward to the writings that the travels will inspire! - and the viewing too. :) Stay safe and have a great time. <3

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  2. That was quite a revelation. To find out that your entire family might not be what you thought it was. Maybe he should've kept quiet about his discoveries. I'm not sure truth is always the right course, morally and ethically.

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    1. Truth is sometimes the most difficult course. Who decides what is moral or ethical? Is it okay to lie because it won't rock the boat? Each person must answer that for himself/herself.

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  3. I am loving this continuing story and hope (so much) that it is not over yet. In my experience families are often minefields - and uncharted ones at that.

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    1. Yeah, well this one has definitely turned out to be a minefield! It's probably going to continue for the next few challenges. Thanks.

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  4. I'm so glad you continued this story - it's fascinating!

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  5. Nila, this story continues to intrigue. Thank you. Such mind-boggling news to break over coffee! How is this going to go down? Ghosted or not?

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    1. We shall see. Will she be able to leave things alone? Will he?

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  6. Wow. And for being the zillionth post (um, not into the math, but you've done a freakin' lot). You are just SO creative. You are such a good writer. I am in awe. That's it. ' Nuff said on this milestone of blog posts. Dang, girl!

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    1. Thank you, Joanne. So glad to have you here for it! <3

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  7. What a conundrum. I can see one's culture will taint this discovery. Well written. I like these two.
    Nancy

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    1. Thank you. I like them too. But they've got themselves into a real tangle now :)

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  8. Sometimes there is no easy answer. A very well-written piece.

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    1. Most times there isn't. Thanks.

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    2. Absolutely. Life isn't easy. Thanks for reading.

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  9. Hi, Here is Pat Garcia, and I can only hope that my comment goes through under anonymous. I remember the beginning of this story vividly and am delighted that you have continued with it. Facing the truth or living a lie. That is something that we alll should think about. Truth has weight and it is heavy, whereas a lie is lite and shallow. You have done a great job with pointing this out in this part of the story. I look forward to reading the next episode. Shalom shalom

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    1. I'm so with you on the weight of the truth, it is unmistakable because of it. Takes real courage sometimes to stick to the truth knowing that a lie would be so much pleasanter. Thank you for the trouble you took to comment. Much appreciated.

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  10. Oh God, I really empathise with Mukta. This is the kind of truth that can change so many things. I will be waiting to read what she does next.

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    1. She's going to have a hard time of it whatever she does, isn't she?

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  11. 🎉 Happy 1000 post!!! Huge accomplishment.
    Sneaking the poster into the story, lol, fun way to tap the prompt.
    Lots of emotion woven in here.
    This reminds me of a Netflix holiday movie, The Noel Diary.
    https://www.imdb.com/title/tt13007592/

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    1. Thanks! and thanks for the movie reco too, haven't watched that one - I do love holiday movies. :)

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  12. This story is so intriguing. What twists you've brought to both characters, with more to come. I really like how you've woven all together -- even to the poster on the wall, yet the focus remains the conflict within over whether to tell what truly happened and the external implied conflict over who will ultimately benefit. Lovely work!

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    1. Thank you for that feedback. It's always a problem knowing the right thing to do, isn't it? I've been away, just catching up over here now. So glad you enjoyed the story.

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  13. Hi Nila - this is brilliantly told ... I am drawn in to the plot - to the story ... and feel it's true - perhaps it is! I'm not sure I can wait til August and your next entry ... I do wonder where they are taking you and us ...

    It's so well written - as are all your posts and stories ... I have to spend more time over here - there's lots I've missed. The 1,000th post - very clever of it to have tied in here!!

    Also I couldn't agree more re your comments in the post re the group and friends around us ... excellent - loved it - thank you - cheers Hilary

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    1. Hi Hilary! Your comment re this perhaps being a true story totally made my day! It isn't of course, it's all made up. Except the studio name originally mentioned, that was very much an institution in Calcutta till about the 90's. Rest is all a 'tissue of lies' haha. I'm not sure where or how this one is going to end up, it'll depend on Mukta. She'll tell me in due course, no doubt, when she's ready, hopefully before the August challenge...

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    2. Oh great - I look forward to your entry for August ... cheers Hilary

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  14. Oh how I sometimes wish my family weren't what it is. LOL! I know be careful what you wish for. So well done, so intriguing! Just excellent! Looking forward to more!

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    1. Haha, yeah, that would be exciting! I think it's because I know exactly who and what my family are - all straight forward and no skeletons anywhere within 100 miles of them, that's why I write Muktas and Shovans into stories...

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  15. 1000 posts. Wow! That's a lot of amazing writing. I bow to you.

    Next - this story is incredible. I won't be ghosting you ever.. must keep reading your work.

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    1. Thoroughly relieved to know you're not ghosting! Thank you!

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  16. 1000! That's nothing to sneeze at, as they say. Way to go!

    Creative way to slide the prompt into your story. Love it.
    It feels like a conclusion to your story. If so, I've enjoyed the journey over these many flash fiction bits.

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    1. Glad you enjoyed it, there maybe a few loose ends to wrap up here.

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  17. This is such a compelling story--the grandmother revealed as a woman of passion. Well done, Nilanjana. Also congrats on that 1,000th mark!

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