Tuesday, 29 April 2014

trY and climb, but diagonallY




is for Ya-du


Again, turning towards the East for help.  Ya-du is a Burmese form. Like all eastern forms subject to very tight rules and regulations.

·        Not more than 3 stanzas
·        Each stanza of five lines
·        First four lines of four syllables each
·        Fifth line can have odd number of syllables – 5, 7, 9 or 11
·        Climbing rhyme words like so

---a
--a-
-a-b
--b-
-b---...

where a and b signify the rhymes and

There also must be seasonal references, like the haiku.


Tough or what?  But here’s me trying, the rhyme words marked out in colour:



The spring dawns break
like mistaken
fall, take this hand
between and in
yours, stand with me, lean into the sparrow’s song.

It won’t be there
anywhere soon;
the flare of sun
on sea runs once
even shorter than a birdcall in the mist.







Posted for the A-Z Challenge.




2 comments:

  1. liked the second one .. very interesting form..these rules and regulation thing spoils the creative urge ....nevertheless worth trying

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  2. Another first for me.
    Such a fascinating form... and quite challenging too!
    (New follower via Networked blogs.)
    Writer In Transit

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